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Feb 11, 2018 - 12:58 PM
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edwzoomom
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(More school observations over many years.) CANNIBALS He pushes her into the lockers, tongue filling her throat until I intrude, sending them to class. She proudly leaves, somebody defined as clearly as the outline of a black felt pen by holding his hand in halls. Not heeding my warnings, lunch in his back seat is all she know of happiness. The four-five letter labels her peers have safety pinned to her budding body hang like a kite’s leaden tail. He’ll leave, pluck fresher fruit. She’ll wheel, arms empty only an instant, ripe prey to the always waiting pack. One day too soon, ignorantly puffed by the new label “mother,” this child with child will look for others to define her existence, forever climbing into back seats, always sadly believing the male language of cannibals. (Not all males, of course.) Wow joan. Powerful.
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Thank you all! Just came to me in a furious Seuss-inspired frenzy! Yeah. Seuss is a big influence on my "work" also!
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So. Farewell then. Comp... Er ...never mind that shit, Mongo's back!
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Afghanistan Bananastand Quincy Jones is the man Some are upset that he swears like a sailor But would they object if his skin was paler? Bruce Marshall
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I believe the children are our future Teach them well and let them lead the way show them all the beauty they possess inside Give them a sense of pride to make it easier let the children's laughter remind us how we used to be everybody searching for a hero People need someone to look up to I never found anyone who fulfill my needs A lonely place to be So I learned to depend on me... its just a rough draft atm guys. I think it needs some work. Im not sure but i think line 4 and line 8 seem a bit strained. And some of it seems a bit, well, cliche`d.
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its just a rough draft atm guys. I think it needs some work. Im not sure but i think line 4 and line 8 seem a bit strained. And some of seems a bit, well, cliche`d. Don’t bring me rough drafts - I demand the finished article! (And I thought we had it, pal, from the heart) By George, it would be my greatest love to get it polished off, TG.
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I quite like jackfu's theme, with its hint of Aurans and akabar!
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I don't think is it clichéd, Bill. It is just a bit too Whitney Houstenish. . perhaps, joanie. I think youre right, Not as it stands but with the work of a songwriter, arranger, composer, it possibly could be tweaked into a ballad.
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